8月7日雅思大作文示范写作 | 孩子犯错的自由
【Introduction】
第 一句话说明图的大意：Shown in the graph are three lines that respectively depict the total number of tourists visiting a Caribbean island, as well as the specific numbers of two particular types of tourists. 第 一句话中注意下划线部分是引起了一个倒装句(主语和系动词位置颠倒的倒装)，这种倒装结构可以当成模板套用。The general viewof those numbers is that they all had evident overall growth. 第二句话说明图的最宏观最直观的特点。
【Body】
老章决定按照线的起点顺序展开写作。并且最上面的一条线是total number，那这样的顺序就正好也是让作文的主体部分以“总—分”，即“先总人数，再两种具体游客群体”的结构展开。并且，老章决定把这条线拆成三部分来写：Most conspicuously, the growth in the total number, which started at 1 million, continued for five years. 第 一句话的内容覆盖这条线的前五年作为第 一部分。第二句话把后两年作为后两个部分一句话写完：After it wasinterrupted in when the number stayed at the previous year’s level (approx. 2.7 million), the growth accelerated, and the number surged to 3.5 million. 如何把两个部分一句话写完?善用after这个表达时间先后顺序的词。这样就可以把两句话合成一句话写了。
第二段写起点排在第二位的线：Some of the visitors went on to the island. 第 一句话用一个简单短小的句子介绍一下要描写的人群。接下来这句话的写法值得注意：Although their number, during the years, had an overall increase from roughly 0.8 million to 1.5 million, it was stagnant for two years in a row, which are and , and had a slip afterwards. 这句话用了although这个让步，句子的逻辑是“从整体到特殊细节”，即“虽然整体如何，但是特殊要注意的是什么”。这个句子模式和对应的逻辑模式可以套用。
第三段写起点排在第三位的线，并且，这一段的写作方式和上一段是基本上一样的，那么，这样可以在考场上省脑筋省时间：There were also tourists who stayed on the cruise ships.The years witnessed a marked rise in their number to 2 million from merely 0.7 million, despite the initial slight up-and-down during the first two years. 这句话的句子模式和对应的逻辑模式和上面一段的那一句相同，只是用了不一样的让步引导词despite。同时注意：先to xxx再from xxx也是对的，不用担心。It is also notable that the numberexceeded that of the visitors going onto the island during the course of growth. 最后最好补充一句描写交点处的超越作为一个重要特征。实在是忘记写了也无妨。
词汇注意：高亮标出的表达程度的形容词、已经带有程度意义的动词和一些特殊动词、表达上升下降的名词。
句法注意：通过使用不同的主语来丰富句子的模式，以及长短句的交错。
【Conclusion】
In general, the numbers grew in disparate ways, and the island’s popularityincreased.
结尾段建议有。一句话宏观的方式、粗线条的方式总结主体部分，后半句属于提分点，会写就写，不会写无妨。
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8月7日雅思大作文示范写作 | 孩子犯错的自由
年8月7雅思大作文题目
Some people believe that children have the freedom to make mistakes, while others argue that adults should prevent them from doing so. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
范文及解析
Introduction
For children’s upbringing, some reckon that adults, especially parents, should avoid them from making mistakes, while I tend to harbour the view that teenagers should not be totallyshackled.
【解析】教育类大话题：孩子是否有自由犯错?在一定限制条件之下，允许孩子试错，只要不走极端即可，如青少年犯罪。法律道德是基本底线。
Ø shackle vt. 束缚，阻挠，羁绊〔含贬义〕(用带有情感色彩的词，加强自己的立场)
Body 1
Admittedly, it is justifiable for some to advocate that guardians’ intervention is indispensable to some extent, since they are constitutionally responsible for their children’s growth. Smart parents understand that it cannot count solely on their kids, who, though indeed have the freedom, are too young to distinguish right from wrong, and that external conditions, adults’ advice and supervision, are needed. Therefore, mature adults, particularly parents, steps in and utilises their power. For instance, guardians may put a cap on what kind of video games teenagers play or what sorts of people adolescents make friends with in case those immature children get addicted to games containing too much violence or, even worse, sunk into gangs, which consequently render them off the right life track.
【解析】让步：从法律层面说，家长有责任防止孩子走上歧路，避免其受到不可逆的伤害，毕竟大多数孩子不够成熟，不能明辨是非。
Ø guardian n. [律]监护人
Ø intervention n. 干预(褒)
Ø constitutionally adv. 合乎宪法地
Ø count solely on 仅仅只依赖于
Ø distinguish right from wrong 明辨是非
Ø step in v. 介入
Ø put a cap on v. 限制
Ø off the right life track 偏离人生正轨
Body 2
However, apart from the aforementioned cases, too much interference on children’s making mistakes may incur repercussions running counter to adults’ expectation. More accurately, since most young children are to some degree rebellious, they are less likely to follow every piece of advice from adults, especially when the strict supervision develops into excessive control. Not surprisingly, this may fuel children’s grumble and push them to make mistakes instead. In fact, children should be allowed to learn from experiences. As long as young individuals are well-instructed, they are highly likely to learn from their mistakes about how to tell right from wrong, to take all factors into consideration before making decisions, and toreflect upon and correct themselves.
【解析】除去以上的极端情况，孩子应该有自由在一定条件下试错。从未成年人的特性出发，大多数孩子可能比较叛逆，一味地阻止可能适得其反。从试错中让孩子学会如何辨别是非，如何做决定前考虑周到，如何在犯错后及时弥补，远比家长直接介入更加令孩子印象深刻。
Ø interference n. 干涉(贬义)
Ø incur v. 导致(贬义)
Ø repercussion n. 后果(通常贬义)
Ø fuel vt. 加剧
Ø grumble n. 抱怨
Ø reflect upon oneself 反省
Conclusion
To recapitulate, children should overall learn to be responsible for their own decisions.
【解析】重申观点
Ø recapitulate v. 总结
