8月28日雅思大作文示范写作 | 上大学之前，我可以休假一年吗?
在应对这道题时
Research says more and more business training and business meeting taking place online.
Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
考生在主体部分写了如下一句
The reason behind this is that getting to the given locations, people need to pay for the traffic fees and spend the extra time, even some external problems may impede their way to business working.
考生在写这句话的时候，考虑到出行的时间费用成本，顺便还会“脑补”一下出行过程中的突发情况。然而，这恐怕就有点扯远了，何况看过多期“7分句”专栏的大家能一眼识别的external problems这个复数概念抽象名词并未细化解释吧?
getting to the given locations 考生本意是用现在分词短语作目的状语，行不通呢，表目的时我们一般使用to do。
改写如下
The main reasons for this are that people do not need to spend either their time or their money on travelling to the location where the training or meeting is taking place.
虽然that …部分只是一个从句，但语义上传递的信息是“既不用费钱又不用费时间”，可以理解为两个因素，因此用the main reasons are that …
either … or … 可以用于否定句，表示该否定两个选项(You use "either" in a negative statement in front of the first of two alternatives to indicate that the negative statement refers to both the alternatives.)
例句1：They found no signs of either him or his son.
例句2：… music that fails to be either funny or funky.
3分钟过去了，你学会了吗?
雅思培训基础班
1.课程适合人群/适用阶段
（1）高中水平或雅思5分水平，基础薄弱的学生
（2）基础语法不完备，对雅思没有系统了解的学生
（3）即将进入雅思课程，希望尽早熟悉雅思考题的学生
课程简介
2.课程亮点
（1）1V1定制课程，基础到强化循序渐进。
（2）师资力量雄厚，升学指导团队的平均教龄8年以上
（3）顾问1V1全方位指导，制定专属学习计划
（4）使用原版真题和九天独家辅导资料
（5）实体教学环境，沉浸式高效学习
课程整体介绍
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阅读知识点
听力知识点
口语知识点
写作知识点
核心词汇拓展
相关题型分类练习
英语听力
听力常作为一种考试题型，目的在于考察应试者对英语语言的把握，考察考生对英语日常交流的理解能力;通常有听对话选择答案、听句子默写关键字词几种形式。
英语写作
通过本课程的系统学习，每位学生能写出内容充实，在此基础上，掌握撰写毕业论文的基本技能。要熟练掌握提纲及提要和读书报告的撰写技巧，写作速度大约平均在每小时200-300词。
学习收获
现报名可打八五折
（仅限前100名学员）
（1）课前顾问对学生学习能力1对1评估，量身打造课程，帮助学生充分完成课前预习
（2）课中导师双语沟通，进行雅思题型总结，对原版真题进行知识点精讲
（3）课后完成多样化作业并进行学术测试，班主任线上线下24小时答疑
8月28日雅思大作文示范写作 | 上大学之前，我可以休假一年吗?
年8月28雅思大作文题目
School leavers go travelling or work before they go directly to the university.
Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages on their study?
本周的考题是剑桥5上的一道真题，虽然问法不完全一致，但参考范文也完全可以回应今天这道题目。本期，我们就来分析一下考官范文。
范文
Introduction
It is quite common these days for young people in many countries to have a break from studying after graduating from high school. The trend is not restricted to rich students who have the money to travel, but is also evident among poorer students who choose to work and become economically independent for a period of time.
【解析】
• 开头就是背景铺垫，同义替换“have a break from studying after graduating from high school”点出核心讨论主题
• It is quite common these days for somebody to do something.
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The reasons for this trend may involve the recognition that a young adult who passes directly from school to university is rather restricted in terms of general knowledge and experience of the world. 对比By contrast, those who have spent some time earning a living or travelling to other places have a broader view of life and better personal resources to draw on. 递进They tend to be more independent, which is a vert important factor in academic study and research, as well as giving them an advantage in terms of coping with the challenges of student life.
【解析】
• 先分析“利”的一面：间休年能让学生见识更广博、拥有更多可利用的个人资源、变得独立且能应对生活挑战。
• 对比：by contrast 对比过程中要有侧重，避免更重篇幅落在对“直接升学”的讨论上，这部分考官只用了一句话带过，约占整段内容的1/3。
• recognition 认知 = understanding (n.)
have a broader view of life 拓宽人生视野
draw on personal resources 利用个人资源
cope with the challenges of life 应对人生挑战
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However, there are certainly dangers in taking time off at that important age. 分析观点 Young adults may end up never returning to their studies or finding it difficult to readapt to an academic environment. They may think that it is better to continue in a particular job, or to do something completely different from a university course. 驳斥But overall, I think this is less likely today, when academic qualifications are essential for getting a reasonable career.
【解析】
• 压后分析“弊”的一面：中心句点出段落讨论核心“dangers”，再续以论证分析学生们可能不会回去学习或无法适应学习环境。
• 立场是利大于弊，因此本段还给出了必要的驳斥：学历相当关键，所以学生不大可能放弃学业。
• take time off 休假
end up doing something 到头来...
academic qualifications 学历
get a reasonable career 找到相当不错的职业
Conclusion
My view is that young people should be encouraged to broaden their horizons. That is the best way for them to get a clear perspective of what they are hoping to do with their lives and why. Students with such a perspective are usually the most effective and motivated ones and taking a year off may be the best way to gain this.
【解析】
• 结尾总结上文的同时表态“利大于弊”，本部分要求清晰且不重复主体的措辞
• broaden one’s horizon 拓宽视野
get a clear perspective of 对…有更清晰的认识
