11月1日雅思大作文真题参考范文 | 父母为什么给孩子施加压力?
数据图：【柱图】
注意：
1)年份连续，可以同色柱子的顶点连线，从而柱图变成四线图。
2)尤其要会写“没有贯穿全时段的线”。
Introduction
Shown in the chart are a particular store’s annual numbers of rentals and sales of films in three formats. And the investigated period spans from 2002 to 2011.
* 本段第 一句是倒装现象。这个倒装句型可以当成套话记住和使用。Shown in the xxxx are/is xxxxxxx.
* 第二句话的写作方式在之前的范文中也经常出现。就是把年份或者地点拿出来写成单独一句。
* 对于图形的总述，如果在开头没有就在结尾必须有。
# Body
Firstly, there was an obvious slide in the number of rentals– from approximately 185,000 to barely 60,000 over the year. Secondly, following a different trend, DVD sales had a surge and reached over 170,000 copies in 2004. In that year, DVD sales for the first time overtook / exceeded the number of rentals. During the subsequent years, increasing numbers of DVD copies were sold, and the peak of sales – 215,000 copies – occurred in 2007. Thereafter, the salesslid gradually to 170,000 copies. However, DVD remained most popular / the most popular format.
* 既然是线图，就是线图的写法。
* 但是别忘记对图中的信息进行分组。主体部分的第 一段是两条贯穿了整个period的线。
* 下一段是两条“没有贯穿全时段”的线。
VHSdisappeared in the store in 2006, and the four years before 2006witnessed its plummeting sales from over 80,000 to 10,000 copies. By marked contrast, it was not until the year of 2007 that Blu-ray films were sold in that store, and in that year, the sales were merely a few thousands. After that, there was a slow growth to roughly 15,000 copies.
* 这一段尤其值得注意。
* “没有贯穿全时段”的线怎么写。
* 尤其是在写Blu-ray时的强调(时间状语)句。
# Conclusion
Overall, the situation varied enormously from kind to kind / from one kind to another.
* 对于图形的总述，如果在开头没有就在结尾必须有。
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11月1日雅思大作文真题参考范文 | 父母为什么给孩子施加压力?
年11月1雅思大作文题目
Nowadays, some parents put a lot of pressure on their children. Why is the reason for doing that? Is this a positive or negative development for the children?
高分范文及解析
01、nvolution which means irrational or involuntary competition has become a buzzword. In order to win the race in education, some parents put a lot of stress on their children. Personally, it is a negative development for the children.
02、This development can be reasoned by a highly competitive environment. <解释竞争激烈的原因 Due to globalization and overpopulation, an overwhelming number of talents swarm into the same labor market, even leading to an oversupply of candidates. Naturally, the market follows the law of the jungle, which means the strong wins. Facing such fierce competition, some parents may consider it necessary for their children to win even from childhood. <最后拉回施压 Therefore, them put a lot of pressure on their children in the hope of gaining early success, like academic success, in this competitive race.
解析
Ø overpopulation 人口过剩
Ø oversupply 供应过剩
Ø the law of the jungle 丛林法则
03、Personally, this would do harm to not only children’s academic performance but also their long-term mental well-being. <让步 There is no denying that proper pressure provides a boost to students’ study, <反驳 but excessive and long-term strain can only be counterproductive. In terms of study, children learn mainly because of pressure, instead of the desire of self improvement. This inappropriate incentive goes against the essence of education. When children realize that and fail to bear excessive pressure from their parents, it is highly likely for them to rebel or even to give up study. Also, it jeopardizes children’s mentality. When their daily schedules are packed with all sorts of academic tasks, such as after-school classes, they are devoid of chances to socialize with their peers. This exerts a negative influence on their growth and personal communication, further hindering their long-term mental health.
解析
Ø counterproductive 适得其反
Ø go against 背离
Ø after-school classes 课外班
04、To conclude, in a highly competitive era, parents fall in irrational competition easily so they may put too much pressure on their children, which jeopardizes children’s long-term study and mentality.
